Carefree

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It’s the eve of Dusk
Time to take stock
My favourite birds and I
Take flight
We soar
In formation
Over the lagoon
Over the Third Mainland

We are
A beautiful sight –
The envy of willing slaves
We fly
Free of care
To our roost warm and cozy
We know
Tonight’s will be the best sleep ever

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12 responses to “Carefree

  1. Look who’s flying… 🙂

    This verse is carefree. .. What more should we say? Fly above to great heights but even as you do, avoid ‘ands’ as much as you can. Especially when it starts a line.

    Can you consider taking out the article ‘the’ in the third line of the second stanza? Wouldn’t hurt.

    Then, consider removing ‘bridge’ from Third Mainland.

    Well done sis.

    From:”Zika’s Musings” Date:Thu, 17 Sep, 2015 at 17:37 Subject:[New post] Carefree

    zikaolofin posted: ” It’s the eve of Dusk Time to take stock My favourite birds and I Take flight We soar In formation Over the lagoon And the Third Mainland Bridge We are A beautiful sight – The envy of willing slaves We fly Free of care To our roost warm and cozy”

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  2. A pretty fun post this is Zee! I mean having plied the infamous and almighty Third Mainland Bridge and that’s besides the traffic gridlock and logjam that characterizes that spot, making it home to loved ones to go play catch up and rendezvous is about the sweetest ever thing to do! Crown that with a great night sleep and you’d realize just how mighty blessed thou art! 😇😄

    So then, burst loose and let go of your inhibitions, be care and worry free…… with your feet up, hair down; roam wild and free tonight; for tomorrow cometh in just a bit! 😂😂😂

    Great going Zee, keep it coming! 👉😄

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